Over at Scriptshadow, Carson has posted
links to the first ten pages of each of the top five winners of his recent contest. My pages are from entry number four, Nice Girls Don't Kill. Feel free to download and see what you think. They were all interesting reads, and one script in particular kicked my ass, but I won't elaborate until after Carson posts his own reviews.
I learned quite a bit from reading these pages, particularly how easy it is to do nothing for ten pages when you think your reader is a little slow, and how much better it is when you get to the point as quickly as possible.
Have a read. See what you think.
Hi E.B really enjoyed those pages strong style. I'm impressed, can tell you have written a lot.
ReplyDeleteWhere would you rate these ten pages wrt the rest of your work? Would you say this was one of your better pieces?
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ReplyDeleteWazoo, I would, yes. That's why I submitted it. My antagonist in this is the most fun I've ever had writing anyone, and I worked very hard to make sure she had the perfect introduction.
I'm prepared for the criticism. I know there will be some. And hopefully I will get some good ideas from it.
Emily,
ReplyDeleteread your ten pages. Liked them, but I have some notes. Do you want me to post them here?
I'm not above some notes. Since the review hasn't been posted yet, I'd rather get them through email if you're up for it. Thanks for taking the time.
ReplyDeleteI'd rather do this by email too. Alas, I don't have your email address, but please check your twitter mentions.
ReplyDeleteAh. You have to view my profile. Should have pointed that out. I'll hit you up. Thanks!
ReplyDeleteCongrats on this; I knew I recognized the name and title! I'm gonna get into all 5 today and get back at you. Vigilance!
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ReplyDelete(Had to rewrite) As promised, read through the winners. I was impressed with NGDK - ooh boy, nice title, "bad" acronym - but I was also... underwhelmed. I understood setting up MARY BETH but wow, YANA is a cinematic tease. Well paced but by default Mary Beth slows it down. I'd read more for sure; I wonder how your clean writing of increasingly violent acts will read. Congrats again!
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